Re: pronoun usage

Subject: Re: pronoun usage
From: "Suchitra Kumar" <suchi_7 -at- hotmail -dot- com>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Fri, 15 Jun 2001 15:11:23 +0530

Dick-

Thanks for the solution. You're right about segregating the content. That
makes my life simple, to think of it that way.

You also said:
| Now here comes the tricky part: If you publish the release on your own
| site, you are going to leave it in third person. Essentially, you're
| saying, "Here is a release we sent out, and it has crossed the wire, so
| now we can publish it (lterally, make it available to the public)
| ourselves."

Never thought of it like that. I never had a *true* explanation for why the
"examplesoft does all this" sentences appeared unfriendly. So now I know.
<grin>

oh, and sorry for the delayed reply,

Suchitra Kumar


----- Original Message -----
From: "Dick Margulis" <margulis -at- fiam -dot- net>
To: "Suchitra Kumar" <suchi_7 -at- hotmail -dot- com>
Cc: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Sent: Friday, June 08, 2001 4:28 PM
Subject: Re: pronoun usage


| Suchitra,
|
| Here is a way to get your head around the issue: Different rhetorical
| contexts require different types of diction.
|
| When you or the marketing team are writing a news release, even though
| the letterhead clearly states that the writing was done by someone at
| ExampleSoft, you use third person throughout and mention the company
| name as often as possible. The intent is that the recipient will publish
| the release as if it were an impartial report written by a reporter
| about your company.
|
| Now here comes the tricky part: If you publish the release on your own
| site, you are going to leave it in third person. Essentially, you're
| saying, "Here is a release we sent out, and it has crossed the wire, so
| now we can publish it (lterally, make it available to the public)
| ourselves."
|
| So the part of your Web site that consists of published releases will
| continue to be in third person. The rest of your site, though, is more
| akin to a brochure. Therefore, the question is, what person would you
| use when writing a brochure about your company? (I don't know the answer
| to that one. I'd certainly be pushing for first person, but in many
| companies that would be impermissible.) I like your "'We are
| ExampleSoft, an innovative whatever.' or 'At ExampleSoft, we do great
| things'" approach, by the way.
|
| So long as the brochure-type parts of your site are internally
| consistent, they do not have to be consistent with the news release-type
| parts of your site.
|
| Good luck,
|
| Dick

| ------------------------------------------------------------
| Suchitra Kumar wrote:
| >
| > Hi,
| > I write content for our corporate website. I am a little confused as to
| > whether I should use "we" or the company name while writing.
| >
| > Normally, the management/ marketing team sends across some data or
material
| > for the website and also point out what they want highlighted. I then
| > proceed to actually "write" the content.
| >
| > ALL their stuff has "ExampleSoft is an innovative software company.
| > ExampleSoft offers these services",etc.
| > My tendency is to rewrite it as "We are an innovative software company.
We
| > offer these services".
| >
| > However, they pointed out that the company name was not appearing in the
| > text. So I changed it to start with an introduction "ExampleSoft is an
| > innovative whatever." I put that in separate formatting as an
introduction.
| > Then the following text is all "We do this. Our solutions are this"
| >
| > Then they came back to me to say that the usage should be consistent
| > throughout, no third person confusion. I thought the argument was valid.
So
| > my final version was to use the introduction as "We are ExampleSoft, an
| > innovative whatever." or "At ExampleSoft, we do great things". That made
| > things simple.
| >
| > But I've seen some websites use a combination of company name and we. It
| > "sounds" normal when I read it, but that could just be my ignorance. Any
| > thoughts??
| >
|


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pronoun usage: From: Suchitra Kumar
Re: pronoun usage: From: Dick Margulis

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