Re: How to deal with incorrect editing

Subject: Re: How to deal with incorrect editing
From: Ilona Koren-Deutsch <ilonakd -at- yahoo -dot- com>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Mon, 29 Dec 2003 11:34:14 -0800 (PST)



--- Rachael Lininger <techwhirl -at- earthlink -dot- net> wrote:
> The article was a short piece on security awareness
> for the company newsletter. The first two paragraphs
> started like this:
>
> "Like a lot of people, you may have received an
> email asking you to verify your "account
> information" for your Big Bank account or other
> online services. These emails ask you to click on a
> link and then enter your personal information. That
> might be your username and password, your social
> security number, your credit card number and
> expiration date, or other data.
>
> "These emails are frauds."
>
> The paragraphs were was changed to: "Like a lot of
> people, you may have received emails asking you to
> verify your Big Bank "account information" or other
> online services. These emails ask you to click on a
> link and then enter your personal information. That
> might be your username and password, your social
> security number, your credit card number and
> expiration date, or other data.
>
> "These are fraud emails."

Maybe your boss could go for a compromise. Something
like:

"... you may have received email.... This email asks
you to..."

"This email is fraudulent."

I don't like the construction "an email" any more than
I like "emails". Email stands for electronic mail.
Would you say "... you may have received a mail"?

-Ilona



=====
Ilona Koren-Deutsch
Documentation Specialist
ARC

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