a matter of language and improvement

["Daniel Ng" <kjng -at- gprotechnologies -dot- com>]

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For technical writers and the like. It looks great.

How does this read?
What would you suggest?

See Introduction page 10

http://download.acronis.com/pdf/TrueImage2009_ug.en.pdf
 
As a case study.


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