RE: one word, not "if", for "as long as"

Subject: RE: one word, not "if", for "as long as"
From: "Cardimon, Craig" <ccardimon -at- M-S-G -dot- com>
To: "'Porrello, Leonard'" <lporrello -at- illumina -dot- com>, 'Lauren' <lauren -at- writeco -dot- net>, "'techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com'" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Mon, 23 Apr 2012 19:56:40 +0000

I love "Monkey Madness"

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From: Porrello, Leonard [mailto:lporrello -at- illumina -dot- com]
Sent: Monday, April 23, 2012 3:58 PM
To: Cardimon, Craig; 'Lauren'; 'techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com'
Subject: RE: one word, not "if", for "as long as"

Agreed. "You" is often perfect as it draws the reader into the text. For example, "Perform steps A, B, and C before buttering the monkey. If you omit one of the steps, the monkey may get mad."

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From: techwr-l-bounces+lporrello=illumina -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com [mailto:techwr-l-bounces+lporrello=illumina -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com] On Behalf Of Cardimon, Craig
Sent: Monday, April 23, 2012 12:49 PM
To: 'Lauren'; 'techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com'
Subject: RE: one word, not "if", for "as long as"

Sometimes avoiding "you" is clumsier than simply using it.

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From: techwr-l-bounces+ccardimon=m-s-g -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com [mailto:techwr-l-bounces+ccardimon=m-s-g -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com] On Behalf Of Lauren
Sent: Monday, April 23, 2012 3:49 PM
To: techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
Subject: Re: one word, not "if", for "as long as"

On 4/23/2012 11:31 AM, Laura Lemay wrote:
> On 4/23/12 10:03 AM, "Monique Semp" <monique -dot- semp -at- earthlink -dot- net> wrote:
>> ³The subdomains can be
>> different as long as the top level domains are the same.²
> You can use different subdomains but the top level domain must be the
> same.

"You"? I prefer to avoid pronoun references in technical documentation.
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Re: one word, not "if", for "as long as": From: Laura Lemay
Re: one word, not "if", for "as long as": From: Lauren
RE: one word, not "if", for "as long as": From: Cardimon, Craig
RE: one word, not "if", for "as long as": From: Porrello, Leonard

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