RE: Advice on rewriting translated ops manuals

Subject: RE: Advice on rewriting translated ops manuals
From: "Combs, Richard" <richard -dot- combs -at- Polycom -dot- com>
To: "Porrello, Leonard" <lporrello -at- illumina -dot- com>, Techwr-l <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 25 Jun 2013 10:42:46 -0700

Porrello, Leonard wrote:

> On a side note, why does your style guide avoid "you", and how would you
> rewrite your examples without resorting to the passive voice? (Disclaimer: I
> have nothing against the passive voice when it is used judiciously, and am not
> looking to debate the issue.)

And an important side note it is. The two example sentences Anonymous cited are fine as they are. Any attempt to rewrite them to eliminate "you" is bound to make them less readable and clear. The silly notion that we shouldn't address the reader is so 1980s! :-)

Richard G. Combs
Senior Technical Writer
Polycom, Inc.
richardDOTcombs AT polycomDOTcom
303-223-5111
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RE: Advice on rewriting translated ops manuals: From: Porrello, Leonard

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