Re: Correct Grammar

[Christopher Miller <cmmiller -at- BRAHMS -dot- UDEL -dot- EDU>]

On Thu, 30 Mar 1995, charles desaro wrote:

> Here's one for all of you English "Experts".  With the following poem:

> "On the beach of indecision
> lay the bleached bones of thousands
> Who with victory in sight
> Sat down to think about it"

> On the third line should the first word be Who or should it be When?



I say Who.

When in doubt about poetry, I find it helpful to write it out and
punctuate it like *real* writing. Thus,


"On the beach of indecision lay the bleached bones of thousands who, with
victory in sight, sat down to think about it."

This would still make sense without the phrase, "with victory in sight."



Chris Miller
cmmiller -at- brahms -dot- udel -dot- edu