Re: help my sentence... please (resolution)

Subject: Re: help my sentence... please (resolution)
From: "Kahn, Stacey" <skahn -at- WB -dot- COM>
Date: Tue, 8 Aug 1995 15:26:40 U

Thanks to all who responded to my problem sentence of framis, thingy, whatsis,
whoosies, and whizbang.

Starting from:

In addition, the framis requires a thingy to have been developed,
using the whatsis tool, that contains whoosies to be used in the
whizbang.

And based on your suggestions, I have rewritten for:

[Paragraph is about what you've got to do before using the framis to develop a
whizbang (i.e., the prerequisites to building a whizbang, which is done using
the framis.)]

You also need to develop a thingy before you can build a whizbang. Thingies,
which you develop using the whatsis tool, contain the whoosies that are used by
the whizbang.

FWIW, the users to whom the manual is targeted are indeed technical; they do
actually "develop" the thingy.

Thanks again--

--Stacey Kahn Washington, D.C.
skahn -at- wb -dot- com
speaking for myself and not for my employers


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