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Emma Heftman writes:
Should it be:
"The line of information that is displayed at the top of the screen
refers to..
or
"The line of information that appears ..."
or
" The Device Identity screen displays a line of information at the top
of the
screen, which refers..."
All are grammatically correct, but consistency is important. If your
company has a preferred style - go with it. The issue with display
centers on people who tend to say (incorrectly), "The line of
information displays at the top of the screen." While technical people
like this version [for brevity], it brings to mind an image of CRTs
displaying for potential mates (to borrow a memorable metaphor from
Jason W.).
P. S. You could drop "that is" from the first example.
It really is pretty simple when you get used to it.....
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