Re: VERBAGE

Subject: Re: VERBAGE
From: Buck and Tilly Buchanan <writer -at- WF -dot- NET>
Date: Thu, 18 Sep 1997 16:19:36 -0500

>
> In much of our documentation the sentence (or one similar) appears:
> Select the ABC Menu function you want.
> It was:
> Select the ABC Menu function you desire.
>
> Due to the connotations of desire we revised as shown.
>
> Is there a better way to say this? The words can be totally rearranged
> and/or replaced


As a minimalist, I find myself saying:

Select an ABC Menu function.

Everything else is either superfluous or redundant.

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