Better wording: lose the passive

Subject: Better wording: lose the passive
From: "Geoff Hart (by way of \"Eric J. Ray\" <ejray -at- raycomm -dot- com>)" <ght -at- MTL -dot- FERIC -dot- CA>
Date: Mon, 5 Oct 1998 06:54:56 -0600

Dahlia asked for ways to improve <<The company was responsible for
developing the integrated system, XXXXX.>>

Depends entirely on what you mean by "responsible". If the company
developed the software, say "The company developed the software". If
you mean that you can blame the company for creating the software,
say "The company can be blamed for [took responsibility for?]..." If
you mean that the company had a management role assigned to them,
then say "The company was given the responsibility to develop..." (if
you want to preserve the passive voice) or "the company managed the
development of..." (if you don't).
--Geoff Hart @8^{)}
geoff-h -at- mtl -dot- feric -dot- ca

"Microsoft Word: It grows on you... but with a little fungicide,
you'll be feeling much better real soon now!"--GH

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